DENIED Gooc whitelist application

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Part 1 of 4
Out of Character
Provide information about yourself here.

MineCraft Username(s):

Answer - Gooc


Full UUID for your MineCraft account(s) (Found here):

Answer -
c87984e2-06f1-4e6d-b7d0-958cc0f750ab

How old are you? (We need to know this as our server has an age restriction)

Answer - 16


Have you read through our rules? (Found here)

Answer - Indeed


Do you agree with our rules?

Answer - Indeed


How did you hear about Tale of Banners?

Answer - A friend of mine


Do you have any previous roleplay experience?

Answer - Yes


Is there anything you would like to add?

Answer - no



Part 2 of 4
Terms & definitions
Answer these definitions using your own words. The definitions can be looked up if necessary, however copy-pasting is not allowed.
What do you define as roleplaying?

Answer - placing a character into a fantasy world and playing through that character


Describe the term ‘powergaming’

Answer - when you don’t give the opposing side a chance to respond, I.e *stabs the man* is invalid, you must attempt


Describe the term ‘metagaming’

Answer - when you take ooc information and use it through your character to sway an opinion or an action


What is a "Mary-Sue" character?

Answer - A character with a lack of flaws, lacking any depth and more or less being “perfect”



Part 3 of 4
Character Creation
Here you will create a character to use on our server.
Provide us with an ingame screenshot of your character’s skin.

Answer -


Name:

Answer - Edwin Rhos


Age:

Answer - 14


Culture:

Answer - Northerner


Story & Biography:

Answer - Edwin Rhos was a boy growing up north. He enjoyed the people he grew up with and strengths taught to him by his mother Jane and his father Timothy yet he felt like he wanted more out of his life. He heard much talk of the noble lands, and people known as Oserians, located in the center of esna. He left at the age of 12, and frequently writes his mother who is up north. His father, being a small time guard from the district is too occupied to respond with things such as work. For the past two years, Edwin has grown up in the center selling many minerals and frequently working out to achieve his goal of a good BMI ratio and consist of mostly muscle with a lean fit. He trains mostly on his own and is self taught since he left his home district. The brains may be what gets him farthest in life, developed from his mother who was a political figure in the north.



Part 4 of 4
Open-ended questions
At least three must be answered. Delete the spares(if applicable). Please include at least one paragraph for each of the answered questions.

Question 1
You stumble outside into the open air after some heavy drinking in an Oserian tavern. Just before you're about to pass an alleyway, a hooded man rushes out of it and runs for it - seemingly, he has both a blade and some jewellery on him. You take a quick peek in the alleyway to see a feminine figure collapsed on the ground, holding her hands over a bleeding wound in her torso. The thief is about to escape and the woman seems in critical condition. You...

Answer: Edwin would peer over, he would look swiftly as the man ran off. He would then plop up aside the corner before letting off a prayer for the girl. He would wait for the man to go as he went to check on the woman. Lifting her into his arms he would bring her into the tavern and ask for help from the others.


Question 2
You are on your way to the Korsian city of Telth to sell some wares. Upon reaching the front gates you are stopped by the guard. They deny you entry for the time being as the traffic into the city is too high. You are effectively forced to wait in the refugee camp located between the two gates for the time being. The camp is
filled with shopping stalls and refugees sleeping on the floor. How do you spend your time in the camp?

Answer: Hello, I’m Edwin Rhos, i wish to apologize for the lack of supplies and helping given to you by the government. Believe that one day I will change these things and help you all. First order of business being the sleeping situation.

Question 4
In the midst of battle, you find yourself approaching a wounded enemy soldier. The soldier is on the floor, clearly in terror as they cradle one of the dead. Enemy forces begin to advance in the distance and you know you have to act fast. The soldier then grasps at a cloth and removes it from the dead soldiers pocket. They continue to cry, and starts calling the dead soldier's name in despair. Then the soldier glances up to see you - with your weapon up - but does not care of your approach, continuing to cradle the dead soldier. You…


Mercy is not my strong suit, let it be known that the bodies will flood the streets and this is the course of war. Edwin would say letting a tear drop from his eyes as he shows a lack of mercy amongst the man slashing into his neck after saying a prayer.
 
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Your application has been denied.

While in this state it is unsuitable for approving, you are welcome to try again.

The reasons for the denial are as follows:

1. You must provide a skin for your character.

2. Your character is unlikely to be able to read. He's a northerner, so there would need to be very specific reason as to why he'd be schooled to be able to read. Also, he left home at 12. That would not only keep him from learning anything to an adept level, but possibly result in death before reaching Oseria.

3. Your character's skills/past-times/trades don't line up with his culture/race and age. There isn't any explanation as to where his brain power is coming from, especially with term/the idea of BMI(it wasn't a thing back in those times) and there certainly isn't anything about why would a kid be selling minerals or how he acquired them.

4. As for your character's parents: the father being a guard is fine, but I'm not sure why'd he be able to write letters to his 14 year old son even if found the time, northerner guards or military types don't often practice literacy unless their position requires it(you state Edwin's father is small-time). The mother a political figure - please elaborate on whatever do you mean by this. Is it a five spirits' based position? A bloodline/higher tribe related one? A military-political one?

4.1. Assuming the woman was indeed some sort of smart, political(?) figure, and the father was a man who knew the dangers of other men because of his profession, why would they let their 12 year old son to go to Oseria?

5. Regarding your open endeds, your responses seem off for a character of that age. Please research powergaming and mary-sues a little further to help you with this.

5.1. In the oserian tavern one, you suggest a 14 year old boy, who happens to also be heavily drunk, can carry a grown woman.

5.2. In the battle scenario, you suggest that even as a 14 year old, Edwin is capable to participate in a war and even kill grown, armoured enemies.

5.3. The last two scenarios you picked to fill contradict the character somehow. If he intends to make the best out of the world and be some sort of revolutionary activist, how does that suddenly translate to "bodies will flood the streets" in the last scenario?


Should you choose to re-apply, please make a new application!